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Post by Shelle on Jun 12, 2012 0:26:56 GMT -5
Hey there!! awesome character!! I would just like you to adjust a few things before we get started!
It's nothing major, just some small things.
I would like you to add her height into her description, not personality.
I would like you to elaborate on her personality a bit. What is she like around her family opposed to her friends/strangers? How do others perceive her before they get to know her. Stuff like that. Just a few more sentances. And I do not beleive that they follow horoscopes in this world, so that part should be taken out, please! xox
I would also like to hear more about her history. What was life like for her growing up. What events led her to fake her own death and run away from home? What did she do after she left? how did she survive? I'm just trying to give you ideas =3
Anyways, I can't wait to hear more about her, and I also love your drawing! Thank you so much for co-operating!!
Shelle
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Post by Aria on Jun 13, 2012 13:33:08 GMT -5
Hello~ I see you've modified your post, and it looks good! However, as Shelle said, you could still expand upon your personality and history more! Particularly history.
The 'History' section of the profile should undoubtedly be the longest. It's where you showcase your prowess as a writer, while also giving you the chance to really expand on your character and make them an individual! Most background/history sections are expected to be at least around 3 paragraphs long.
It's tedious and annoying, I know. But putting a lot of time into a lengthy history tells us that you will put time into further developing your character later, and really spending time in the roleplay!
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